Wrote this after forgetting something obvious

[Zach91]

First time sharing this one.

I stood in the shop for a full minute
certain I needed something.
I left with three things I did not need
and forgot the original something.

At home the something became obvious.
I did not go back.
I bought it online at eleven at night
and paid extra for the fast track.

Happy to hear thoughts

[Cheugy]

That is the sensible approach. Worth a look if you have not already

[CMPunk02]

Completely agree with that. Every bit helps at the moment.

[Emma92]

That is the nuanced version of it. The interesting part of this conversation is how differently people are reading it.

I find these conversations more useful than reading reviews

[Rogue Sam]

Been reading the same thing from a few different angles. The difference between what is being reported and what is actually happening is often significant.

I will keep following it

[ProperMadlad20]

Hmm, I found different. Glad someone asked this.

Cheers

[ShawnMichaels]

Yeah that is about right. Legend

[Hawk]

There is something very relatable about forgetting the one thing you went in for. The poem captures that strange little moment where the brain confidently says "I have a plan" and then immediately abandons it.

The details about leaving with unnecessary items make it work because everyone has had a version of that day.

[Bayley_US]

A lovely bit of everyday observation here. Small failures like this are perfect poetry material because they are funny while also saying something about how distracted we all are.

The shop scene reminds me of those moments when you open a cupboard and forget why you walked into the kitchen. The mind is a strange place.

[Leo34]

The contrast between being so sure and completely missing the obvious is the strongest part for me. It turns a simple shopping trip into a little story about memory and attention.

Would be interesting to see a longer version exploring what the forgotten item was, because sometimes the smallest details create the biggest laughs.

[Kieran88]

This has a nice self-deprecating feel to it. There is a fine line between making fun of yourself and being too harsh, and this lands on the kinder side.

Everyone has those moments where the brain decides the important thing is suddenly the least important thing in the room.

[Jonathan11]

The funny thing is that forgetting something obvious often feels more memorable than remembering everything. Those little disasters become the stories we tell later.

A poem about buying random things instead of the thing you needed is basically a universal experience. The checkout line has witnessed many tragedies like this.

[Wendy5]

Not sure the forgotten item even needs to be revealed. Sometimes leaving a gap gives the reader space to put their own version into the poem.

The strongest poems can make someone think "that happened to me" without needing a huge dramatic event.

[Grace31]

This reminds me of how ordinary moments can become surprisingly meaningful. A missed shopping list sounds small, but it can say a lot about being human and a little scattered.

The humour keeps it light too. Too many poems about daily life forget that everyday mistakes can be funny.

[Ben]

There is a nice honesty in writing about something that is not a grand adventure. Sometimes the best subjects are the ones people usually ignore.

A forgotten item, three unnecessary purchases, and a walk home full of regret is basically a tiny epic story.

[Donna48]

The poem has a good rhythm for a memory piece. It feels like someone telling a friend about a ridiculous day rather than trying too hard to sound poetic.

Those are often the pieces that connect most because they feel lived in.

[HighKey15]

The opening image works well because everyone can picture standing there trying to remember. That frozen moment where your brain refuses to load the answer is painfully familiar.

Would happily read more pieces in this style, especially if they keep finding comedy in normal situations.