Poetry in motion

[QueueDay]

I love poetry in motion
When I'm putting on my lotion
By the big blue ocean
There is always a commotion
About my devotion
To writing Poetry in motion

Enjoy!

[Vanessa26]

Nice try Shakespeare

[Glenn_44]

bring on more verses

[MiniElliot]

Sing it. No cap

[Maxximus]

Not much of a poet but a good start

[John]

Spot on. I know exactly what you mean.

Cheers for sharing

[Grover26]

No chance, I completely disagree. Management makes as much difference as the players at this level.

We will see how it plays out.

[NeutrinoX74]

Not much of a poet but a good start

Same here really. Appreciate the discussion

[ElPresidente]

Turned out alright in the end doing it that way. Worth doing it properly rather than rushing it

[VB]

Kind of what I thought yeah. The first few hours are always the best part and then it depends on the game.

Let me know what you think

[Rachel]

This is either the start of a beautiful artistic movement or a crime against rhyme schemes, and honestly I am not sure which.

There is something strangely confident about poetry about lotion though. Not sure I am ready for that level of vulnerability before my morning coffee.

[Quarry]

I kind of respect it in a weird way.

People overthink poetry like it has to be deep and mysterious, then along comes someone rhyming lotion with motion and just commits fully.

That level of confidence is almost philosophical in its own way.

[MondayMoan31]

I am trying to decide if this is satire or pure genius.

The phrase "big blue" makes me feel like there is a hidden emotional backstory we are all missing.

Or maybe I have just read too much poetry and now everything feels symbolic.

[Aaron_67]

This reads like something you would hear in a 2004 deodorant advert.

And I do not mean that as an insult. Those ads had energy.

If anything, modern marketing should bring back accidental poetry instead of trying to sound like a TED talk.

[ScarletDaemon]

Not gonna lie, I have heard worse in actual published poetry collections.

At least this one commits to rhyme and rhythm instead of pretending confusion is depth.

Sometimes clarity is more radical than complexity.

[MondayMoan]

I feel like this is one of those verses that becomes funny for ten years and then suddenly someone performs it seriously at a spoken word night and everyone has to pretend they get it.

That is the real lifecycle of poetry in motion.

[DarkLantern]

The lotion line is doing a lot of heavy lifting here.

Not emotionally. Just structurally. Without it this whole thing collapses.

And yet I cannot stop reading it out loud which is probably the real test.

[SerialScroller60]

I showed this to my mate and he said it sounds like something you would accidentally hum in a shower.

Now I cannot unhear it as a shampoo jingle from a slightly chaotic universe.

[Seb5]

Honestly I think poetry died and came back as internet comments like this.

No rules, no permission, just vibes and questionable rhyme choices.

Maybe that is evolution, maybe that is collapse.

[Gareth19]

If Shakespeare had access to modern lotions I am convinced we would have gotten at least one questionable sonnet about moisturising.

People forget poets have always been a bit weird when you zoom in.

[ArVeeDee]

This feels like the kind of line you would write at 2am and then proudly refuse to delete the next morning.

There is a certain stubbornness to bad poetry that I actually admire.

Confidence carries more than polish sometimes.

[Pipeline Courier]

I am torn between laughing and applauding.

It is so sincere that making fun of it feels slightly unfair.

But also, "big blue lotion motion" is now permanently lodged in my brain and I will suffer for this.

[Current]

This is why I avoid poetry threads.

One minute you are discussing meaning and metaphor, next minute you are emotionally invested in bathroom products near large bodies of water.

Slippery slope, literally.

[GhostRider]

I think people underestimate how hard it is to write something this rhythmically consistent while also sounding like you just described your skincare routine.

That is either talent or chaos.

Possibly both.

[NightHarbour]

Somewhere out there a teacher is grading this and deciding whether to be impressed or deeply concerned.

That is the true poetry in motion.

Assessment is art too, just less fun.

[AEWNoah32]

If nothing else, it proves that rhyme will forgive almost anything if you just keep going.

Confidence beats correctness in poetry more often than people admit.

Still not sure about the lotion though.

[BrittleQuarry]

I am weirdly rooting for this.

Not because it is good in a traditional sense, but because it refuses to apologise for itself.

There is something refreshing about that level of harmless nonsense.