A short one about mornings

[IronWolf]

Happy to hear thoughts.

The morning comes in through the gap
where the curtains never fully meet.
A stripe of it falls on the carpet
and the cat moves into it like a feat

of small navigation.
She settles there without performance.
Outside the birds are loud about it.
She simply lies in confirmation.

Still tweaking it but this is the current version

[Lucy05]

That works if you are disciplined about it, most people are not. Good to know about

[IronWolf]

That works if you are disciplined about it, most people are not. Good to know about.

Really like that take on it. This is exactly the kind of conversation I come here for

[Wendy5]

Been following this thread and that seems right. Good to hear other people's experience

[Candle]

People are always quick to write someone off after one bad performance. The best sides find ways to win ugly and that matters more than the style of play.

Still think I am right on this

[DarkEnergy27]

Worked for me too. Cheers for sharing that

[Jarvis]

I have seen that go wrong more than once. Take your time with it and it will come out well

[RightAbout24]

This has a really nice quiet feeling to it. The image of the morning slipping through a gap in the curtains feels more natural than the usual dramatic sunrise descriptions.

The cat moving into the light is a great little detail too. It gives the poem a living presence instead of just describing a scene. Even the smallest things can carry a lot of weight

[Layla81]

There is something comforting about writing a morning that is not trying to announce itself. A lot of poems make dawn sound like the universe is opening a grand theatre curtain, but this feels more like someone quietly making tea while the world wakes up.

The restraint works well here. Leaving some space around the images makes the reader feel like they are standing in the room rather than being told what to feel.